Jenny’s 100WC Week12
December 2, 2011
Meg and Tom were playing in the park chasing their shadows.Until…they saw another shadow appearing behind them.They looked around there was nothing there.So they carried on chasing their shadows then Meg and Tom bumped into a hard, invisible figure .They were very worried but then the invisible figure came visible.They saw a beautiful lady who had a mysterious sign on her back.They quickly took a picture with an camera and they went to the library to investigate.So they both found a big,brown book.Eventually they found out she was a ghost.
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i love it jenny
great work jenny
I read your 100 words I thought it was amazing well done Jenny.
that is great
I apsilotly loved your story jenny it was fab.I injoyed the story ps you are the best partner you can have.
I realy enjoyed reading challenge:)
I REALY ENJOYED READING JEN
SORRY I SPELT SCHOOL WRONG JENNY.
I REALLY LOVED YOUR STORY. YOU ARE A GREAT STORY TELLER JENNY. WELL DONE. YOUR CHARACTERS MUST BE CLEVER TO TAKE A PICTURE OF A SHADOW.I WANT TO READ MORE OF THIS STORY. PLEASE COULD YOU WRITE THE REST OF IT THEN BRING IT INTO SCOOL.
I think its brill.Wish you can do it again.
This is good , This is so fantastic,I very like that. This is lovely, said Henry.
Jenny, how creepy to see a shadow with nothing there and then to run into something solid that was invisible. I want to know more about this ghost.
Well done!Jenny, for this fantastic story. I really like the bit that Meg and Tom quickly took a picture of the figure. How clever they are!
I am sure you still have a lot more to write about this mystery event! I am looking forward to reading more of your interesting stories.
Jenny that was brilliant!!! You built the suspense and now I want to know more. What was on the sign? Why was she wearing the sign? What did it mean? Why was she following Meg and Tom? I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Brilliant Jenny. You could develop this story into a really exciting narrative. I wonder how long the ghost had been following them? I think I will avoid my shadow in future!
Well done for being chosen for the showcase…look forward to your next entries
What a fantastic effort for your first time entering the 100WC. It is a very mysterious story. There are lots of questions I want to ask, like – What made the sign mysterious and why was the invisible figure hard? Perhaps if you kept on writing I would find out.
I hope you will enter the challenge again next week! :~}
Hello Jenny, this was a very spooky entry for this week’s 100WC. I like the way that your characters were sensible enough to take a photograph so that they could investigate what or who it was. I hope to read more of your writing
Now this is a great mystery piece Jenny! I really like the way you have extended the ‘shadow’ story. Thank you for joining the 100WC this week!