Jenny’s100WC week 18
January 27, 2012
It was another boring day at home. I asked my mum if I could go to Paris for a holiday. But my mum said “No I have to look after your tiny little baby”.She also said she would take me to Paris when it was my birthday. Today was my birthday. I was so excited. I wore my silver dress. I looked amazing! Finally it was time to go to Paris. It was time to go. When we arrived I wanted to go up the Eiffel tower. Mum said it was too dangerous. I didn’t care so I jumped…
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Hi Jenny
Great contribution to the 100WC and interesting use of the prompt words. I like how you have written a narrative of something that perhaps you wish you could do. I like the idea of including speech and you have shown good use of punctuation to add interest to your writing. BUT where are you jumping to!
Well done Jenny!
thats great jenny
Wow Jenny. That is amazing. I really like it when you put my silver dress I can’t wait for more of these different stories.
That is a realy good story Jenny and I want to find out what is going to happen next.
what a great story jenny
Well done Jenny.I want to know what will happen next ppppplllllllleeeeeeeaaaaaaaasssssssseeeeeeeeee.Apart from that well done.
Where did you jump? Were you up the tower? I wonder what will happen next?
Don’t forget to use conjunctions to extend your sentences.
Super work Jenny
Wow Jenny that is amazing keep it up.