Madeline`s 100wc week 21
February 23, 2012
It was a lovely February afternoon Claire and David were strolling hand in hand through the park.David looked around at Claire and her eyes had a glint in them. They went for a warming coffee. After a while Claire smiled at David. Then Claire got on one knee “David will you …marry me?” asked Claire.”What?, oh I mean pardon?” David replied looking suprised.”I asked Will you marry me?” shouted Claire excitedly.It`s the 29th of February.”It`s a leap year!” laughed Claire “Oh dear I forgot it was a leap year and yes I will marry you!” announced David.Everyone in the cafe cheered.”Hoooooorrrrrrrraaaaaaayyyyyyyy”
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Great story Madeline.This is a creative peice of writing and I can picture it when my eyes are fully closed. I want to hear more so please can you write it and bring it in school.I loved the way you used different alternatives to said.I love the warming coffee and the glint in the eye.If you carry on writing like this then it will really improve alot Madeline.Fabulous work. Keep it up.
This is very good and I can picture the scene of the story and the glint in Claire’s eyes. Well done x
This is a nice story and you can close your eyes and picture the scene from the story. Well done Maddy. Auntie Pauline & Uncle Alan
I really really like this story. You used a lot of descriptive words. It was a great story. Good Job!!1
I liked this story. It was really creative and smart!
I like the warming coffee and the glint in the eye! You’ve also used some great alternatives to said – well done!